We have been working on a writing startegy that authors use, “Show Not Tell’. This is when authors describe what could be felt or seen or heard (using the senses) to make the writing more interesting.
Read some of the finished pieces.
My Missing Puppy – by Iris
I screamed! My tears filled my eyes up. I covered my eyes cause I was crying.
All I saw was his paw print on his bowl.
The Birthday – by Emjae
I was so excited today I woke up at 6am in the morning and I was so excited I was was smiling like I was gonna win the lottery. I knew what I wanted for my birthday I went into the kitchen and made myself breakfast And then I went into my parents room sneakily and there was a big box with a tiny hole it was wrapped so I could´t see a black nose came from the box in the little hole…
My Missing Puppy – by Keira
Wait a minute the front door is open. What Should I do? “Can you help me please?”
“Ok ok.”
“I’m going to the park and you guys go somewhere else ok? Got it guys?
“Yes we do.”
I ran to park. Next I ran to the puppy shop to see if he was looking for a friend. Then I ran to the big Field where sometimes she runs around.
My face was boiling hot. I was paranoid.
Wait a minute we had not looked in the backyard . “OH MY GOD!” I thought to myself. I ran home…
Can you write a pargarph for us using ‘Show Not Tell’?
Thanks, Room 1